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The Screenplay: Scene 16

Posted by Dave Bull on January 3, 2023 [Permalink]

John and Mayu sat together on the balcony of their Tokyo apartment, looking out over the city skyline. The sun was setting and the sky was a brilliant orange.

Mayu sighed and turned to John. "So, the visa was rejected," she said.

John nodded. "I'm sorry," he said. "I know you were hoping I could stay."

Mayu nodded. "I know that if we were married, you would be allowed to stay here, but I'm not ready for that step yet."

John reached out and took her hand. "It's okay," he said. "We don't have to rush into anything. I understand."

Mayu smiled and leaned her head against his shoulder. "Thank you," she said. "I'm glad you understand."

John kissed her forehead. "I'm not going anywhere," he said. "We'll figure something out."

Mayu nodded and squeezed his hand. "I know," she said. "We will."

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[ Note from Dave: To say that 'we can see a pattern developing' would be an understatement. We don't have a 'movie', we have an afternoon soap opera. I have been trying to keep the Bot on track by making sure it knows the basic situation 'so far', but it seems that I need to try prompting it to move in some different ways. ]

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Added by: Marc Kahn on January 8, 2023

So... then what happened?



Added by: Dave on January 8, 2023

Marc, we have been just so busy the past week or so (I'm a printer this month) that I haven't had a chance to play with this.

And I'm wrestling with what to do. If I just give it the same 'catch up' type of prompt, I think it is just going to churn out the same 'John and Mayu sat together ...' type of episode.

I need to 'push' it in a new direction, but I don't want to start writing the script myself. Maybe I'll do something like ask it to introduce a new character ... see where that takes us.

Thanks for your patience!



 

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